aight,with two joints converted into ashes,with pink floyd still telling me what is right :)
I give you my own version of "comfortably numb"...
Now you either need to be high or read behind the following lines to get close to what im feeling...
Verse:
I burn the emotions,see myself in the smoke,
The crushed dreams & the nightmares ill invoke,
The moon's drowning in the river it chose,
And i raise my hand,it brings the horizon so close,
Thoughts revolving around the tears that I bled,
The present is waiting,the future getting close to the past,just one step ahead...
Chorus:
I close my eyes,let another one pass
For theres time before my breath ceases to last
And till then ill try to be numb
To feel the void,to be comfortably numb...
Verse:
Living on the edge,I wish to move forward,wish to defy the laws,
But I hope for a dream,for a hope,for a hope that is lost,
I inhale this life,i come close to another gallow,
The feeling of stalked by the man,hiding in ma shadow,
And as the dawn breaks,I see what the night had not shown,
Once again ignite my emotions,see myself in the smoke cuz once again....Im home....
Chorus:
I close my eyes,let another one pass
For theres time before my breath ceases to last
And till then ill try to be numb
To feel the void,to be comfortably numb..
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Aight and my band peeps say they gonna work on this...
Neways,im out!
2 comments:
okay...so datz shubit at his best....dis is mah second fav afta I WISH!!! cum 2 mumbai man!! datz wre ppl lyk u gota b !!
I burn the emotions,see myself in the smoke,
^hey dope kills brain cells, nice way to say, susceptible to more than one interpretation
The moon's drowning in the river it chose,
^wooaah, niceeee, i loved the imagery and the possible sense of it ;)
And i raise my hand,it brings the horizon so close,
^hahaha, pakka doped :P
second verse reduced to simple lines and did not find much to feed my poetic tastes :\
this was an inconsistent work imo, first verse came heavy , but the second verse had lines which anyone could have written (and most have written that actually), i mean hope and lost, and being chased and dawn break and night stuff.
so a distinctness is missing
my expectations however had risen after the first verse, so maybe,
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